Are humans capable of change(ing their title after writing a paper that is incongruous with eleven words above it)?

Thesis: Amazing ideas for the topic sentences, but followed by dialogue and evidence that aren't pertinent to the main point ogf the paragraph nor the thesis.
Structure: The structure wasn't progressive.
Evidence: Quotes were way to long and lacked a proper introduction.
Analysis: Analaysis was at times thoughtful and enlightening, but it was not consistent with thesis and title. In 3rd paragraph, the writer fails to describe why Darcy is Elizabeth's male counterpart...an unexpected cliffhanger. Overall, the ideas were all original and still, in my own essay, I was able to comment on such topics as the female Bennett characters being so well written that they are petinent to today's society.
Style:The opening sentence grabbed my attention, but the unfortunate rambling second sentence seemed not to fit and thus left the reader confused and disappointed. Big (non logical) leaps between paragraphs. Seems very choppy. Doesn't talk about change until last sentence in intro and conclusion! Some language seems convoluted and bulky.